Sooo, I've been working on my writing titled, 'Lyon Saga'. I'm very pleased with what I have so far, but am always looking for criticism, the good, the bad, and the eggly. If anyone could take a few mins and check out the chapter I have put up, then comment, that would be greatly appreciated

Thanks Devart pplz.
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